Assignment for AVID IV - 9/11/15

We will not have face to face class on 9/11/15.  See below for your assignment.

AVID IV Assignment 9/11/15  

Locate your assigned partner (see list below) and exchange the 1st draft of your essay. Since we will not be meeting face-to face for tomorrow's class, you may exchange essays via e-mail or in person. After reading your partner's essay, answer the questions below. Copy and paste the questions and your answers in a Word document.  E-mail critiques to Mrs. Taylor by Wednesday, September 16, 2015.

AVID IV Teams 9/11/15

1.  Joneka Alston                    Santia Manigo
2. Nicholas Nixon                   Aaron Girard
3. Monique Baboram            Heather Winstead
4. Justen Williams                 Bo Wade
5. Lauren Bailey                    Mya Warren
6. Brianna Bennett                Caitlyn Vanorder
7. Mitchell Borum                 David Robbins
8. Arlene Bustamante           Tessa Tyler
9. Avonna Dickens                Camri Taylor
10. Anasya Dowell                   Amber Taylor
11. Kirby Hill                           Nicholas Mills
12. Daisha Hopkins                 Jentel Strand
13. Haley Joyner                     Morgan Smith
14. Jonathan Joyner               Jamal West
15. Fallon Kehoe                     Megan Smith
16. Hannah Kendrick             Krystalyn Setting
17. Tyler Landry                     Hannah Rhodes
18. Jessenia Mills                    Melissa Pulley
19. Courtney Moss         Yentam Pham           Hannah Nixon

Essay Critique Guidelines

Although you may not be a writing expert, you are THE reader of this essay and your response is a valid one. I have found that almost every reader, regardless of experience, can identify the primary strength and weakness in an essay.  In the end, you will find that providing a honest critique of your partner's essay will help you master your own.  Please comment freely and respectfully. Keep in mind that it is better to begin by noting the strengths of the essay before pointing out the areas that need improvement.

  Content: 

• Does the introductory paragraph specifically answer or address what the prompt is asking?  
• What specific examples does the author give in his/her paper that speak to the prompt?  
• What are the supporting details? 

Organization: 

• Does the essay have a clear introduction and conclusion?  
• Does the introduction and conclusion refer to the same idea?  
• How is the essay structured (how many paragraphs, etc)? 
• Are individual paragraphs are organized (clear topic sentences, appropriate and concrete evidence, logical organization of evidence)?

Style: 

• What is the tone of the essay (humorous, serious, reflective, satirical, etc.)?  Is this appropriate? 
• Does the essay have sufficient creativity?  
• Are sentences are worded clearly?  
• Are word choices interesting and appropriate?

Correctness: 

Does the essay have correct grammar and punctuation? 

Example #1 : Rolling around in the bottom of the drawer, Tim found the missing earring. [certainly the earring was rolling, not Tim!]

Example #2:The new manager instituted several new procedures some were impractical

[You could also easily tell that the following sentence actually contains two sentences that need punctuation between them]

In addition to the questions above, answer the following questions...

1.  Give two suggestions to your partner for organizing the essay, such as focusing in on one event rather than many, providing more background, turning explanation into action, etc.?

2.  Give two suggestions to your partner on how they could help you to feel the emotions in the paper, rather than them just describing/writing them.  

3.  How does the essay reveal a significant aspect of the writer’s personality?